Day # 13 Wednesday 12/13

Day # 13  Wednesday 12/13

Mini Lesson identifying weakness:

Yodish

Boring Flocabs Say:	Awesome, Yoda Flocabs Might Say:
The Model T went 45 miles per hour	Speeding 45, the Model T did go
Upton Sinclair exposed that sausage had rat dung in it	Rat dung in sausage Upton did expose
The city streets are overcrowded	Overcrowded are the city streets

Show Don’t Tell examples

Your turn:

Log into your drive.

Pull up your song

Read it over

Identify a stanza that seems problematic
Highlight this stanza red

Work on fixing it.

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Second half:

Choose one stanza to share with your group.

1. Reader needs to have 1-2 questions to ask partner for help
2. Partners should be prepared to share one possible suggestion
3. Talk this through
4. Together make changes where necessary

Now work on making changes throughout your song.

HW: 3rd Final draft due tomorrow